This H2 economics essay is rather well-written, but has a few issues, which could be better addressed.
One, this economics response could benefit from more "on the one hand, but on the other" constructions. Language is important in an economics response, to communicate the right ideas. More contrast would have been beneficial to this economics essay's structure and sound.
Second, this economics paper could be a lot tighter and get to the point faster in some areas, but having said that, as this essay is currently written, it is still very strong. Yes, the essay could also benefit from economics diagrams - so readers and students are encouraged to think of what economics diagrams to draw and how to properly illustrate them. Having said that, this economics essay is well-crafted, detailed, and strong overall. Thank you all for learning, reading, and thinking about improvements, and cheers!